Lon Khanee-Not going to be used

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Lon Khanee-Not going to be used

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Post by Trip » Wed Nov 01, 2017 5:18 pm

Lon Khanee
Lon Khanee
Species: Shistavanen Gender: Male Age: ?? Homeworld: Nar Shaddaa
Career: Soldier Specializations: Sharpshooter
Duty: 0
Earned XP: 30
Available XP: 0
Motivation:
Characteristics
Brawn: 2 Agility: 5 Intellect: 3 Cunning: 2 Willpower: 1 Presence: 1
Derived Attributes
Defense: 0/0 Soak: 3 Wound THR: 14 Strain THR: 12 Encumbrance: 1/13
General Skills
Computers
Athletics
Brawl
Cool
Medicine 1
Melee
Perception
Ranged Heavy 2
Ranged Light 2
Survival 2*
Warefare
*1 of these is racial
Sharpshooter Talents
Grit 1
Dodge 1
Sniper Shot 1
True Aim 1
Expert Tracker 1
Brace 1

Equipment
Credits:
Gear: Comlink (handheld), Military Pack, Stimpack ×2, Ration Pack
Armor: Heavy Clothing
Weapons:
  • Holdout Blaster

Backstory
Lon Khanee, sometimes known only as Lon, was a Shistavanen male scout who sometimes worked for the Uvena System Constabulary. Lon obtained fame working for the Galactic Empire, unaware of the tyranny of his employers. Lon then found a hidden settlement of members of the Alliance to Restore the Republic and, lacking political convictions, decided to help them. He discovered their status as fugitives and swore not to report them. However, the Empire found the settlement nonetheless and discovered that Lon had not reported it. Lon became a fugitive of the Empire, and was forced to hide from the stormtroopers in Mos Espa.
Lon visited the local Podracer Cantina and there he met Lena Nego, a Force-sensitive Florn Lamproid that convinced him to join the Alliance with her. Lena and Lon became lovers and fought the Empire together. While the Shistavanen had initially followed her only to court her, Lon became a proud Rebel warrior, fierce opponent of the Empire and member of Alliance Intelligence. Lena died during the First Battle of Tatooine, and a heartbroken Lon kept on fighting, honoring her last wish.
Personality:
Lon is outgoing. He likes the company of his friends amongst the Rebel Alliance. He is sometimes somber when he starts to think of his lost love. But he tries to hide his sadness behind his sense of humor. He likes to play games like Sabacc and Pazaak.

Appearance:
Shistavanen had pronounced muzzles, sharp claws, long pointed teeth, and pointed ears set on top of their heads. Shistavanen also possessed large glowing eyes, and could also run at high speeds for long periods without getting tired, alternately using two or four limbs. As predators, they possessed keen senses of hearing and smell, and excellent night vision.


Starting Credits
sarenda; Uprising; Credit roll:
Numeric Roll: 1D100+=58
Last edited by Trip on Fri Nov 03, 2017 3:13 am, edited 7 times in total.

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Re: Lon Khanee

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Post by ShadoWarrior » Fri Nov 03, 2017 2:07 am

Soak is wrong for heavy clothing + brawn 2. Spec title (in red) is wrong.

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Re: Lon Khanee

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Post by Trip » Fri Nov 03, 2017 2:18 am

ShadoWarrior wrote:
Fri Nov 03, 2017 2:07 am
Soak is wrong for heavy clothing + brawn 2. Spec title (in red) is wrong.
Thanks. Nice to have an extra set of eyes

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Re: Lon Khanee

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Post by Trip » Fri Nov 03, 2017 2:20 am

did you notice anything about the PCs name?

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Re: Lon Khanee

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Post by ShadoWarrior » Fri Nov 03, 2017 2:23 am

It's a pun of some sort, but I haven't deciphered it (yet). Been distracted.

Duty type is not listed. Is the homeworld correct?

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Re: Lon Khanee

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Post by Trip » Fri Nov 03, 2017 2:28 am

Homeworld for now is correct. I need to read up on the race to think of what is reasonable.

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Re: Lon Khanee comparison

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Post by DeepSpacer » Fri Nov 03, 2017 2:45 am

Skill assortment is 'off', too. No Computers.

I'm going to be honest, so don't take it the wrong way, but you we worried about character overlap and then came up with something with an equal (or greater) amount of skill overlap. Two character are also soldiers (which isn't bad, since we ARE on a Rebel Base, mind you), but all you get over the others two soldiers 'Cool', which the Infiltrator already had.

For soldiers, it is weapons and Brawn-based skills, for the most part. At least with the Infiltrator you diversify into Computers(INT), Melee(Brawn), and Agility-skills to go with the Cunning ones. You could do a lot besides shoot well.

Now.... Shado's PC was pretty much a 'shell' (to me) until he got to the background. I can really work with what he came up with. It helps me see his PC as a complicated being. Perhaps you have a specific background in mind? Or, perhaps it is a gunman in search of a background?

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Re: Lon Khanee

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Post by ShadoWarrior » Fri Nov 03, 2017 2:52 am

Deep, you're not putting nearly enough weight to a player's choice of specialization. Talents differentiate a character far more than what skills they have. Yes, there are now 3 soldiers. But one is a medic, one is a sniper, and one is a tank. Vastly different concepts, and they'll focus on different skills. But most importantly, they'll be taking different talents and even using different gear to best take advantage of their role in the party.

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Re: Lon Khanee

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Post by SavageBob » Fri Nov 03, 2017 3:06 am

Lon Cheney and Lak Sivrak's love child?

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